Do you think investing in new technology is more important than training employees to grow a busines
학생이 쓴 원문
I think if a company doesn\'t have a major technology very well-selling, the company have to invest new technology at the first. Of course, great employee also important to grow up the company. However, if there aren\'t any new technology to learn, employees might feel they doesn\'t have any motivation and they need to repeat same tasks. And if the company doesn\'t have major technology, to be honestly, it is hard to support good environments to employees due to its economic ability. Therefore, the owner of the company have to invest to new technology to make their major weapon.
강사 첨삭
Happy Monday, Mary! You presented a clear argument and explained the relationship between technology, employee motivation, and company growth very well. Your reasoning shows good business thinking. To improve, focus on grammar details such as plural forms (employees, technologies), verb agreement (has to), and natural business expressions like competitive advantage. Overall, strong logic and well-developed ideas!
-Teacher Wela
I think if a company doesn\'t have a major technology very well-selling, the company have to invest new technology at the first.
>> I think that if a company does not have a major technology that sells well, it has to invest in new technology first.
Of course, great employee also important to grow up the company.
>> Of course, great employees are also important for growing a company.
However, if there aren\'t any new technology to learn, employees might feel they doesn\'t have any motivation and they need to repeat same tasks.
>> However, if there is no new technology to learn, employees might feel that they do not have any motivation and have to repeat the same tasks.
And if the company doesn\'t have major technology, to be honestly, it is hard to support good environments to employees due to its economic ability.
>> And if the company does not have a major technology, to be honest, it is hard to provide a good working environment for employees due to limited financial resources.
Therefore, the owner of the company have to invest to new technology to make their major weapon.
>> Therefore, the owner of a company has to invest in new technology to create a strong competitive advantage.
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