Do you think it is a time to change our habits?

Yes I think so. There are lots of bad habits related to the liqour in Korea. When we drink, we sometimes press a alchol on other person who can't drink alchol pretty well. They look to like seeing other people got drunk. When it is a welcome ceremony in Univ, some seniors force a fresh man to drink much alchol at once. Most of the time, a fresh men gets dead drunk. We should notice that it can be very dangerous. Every year , a couple of fresh men die by alchol. And it is a time to change our drinking habit. No more pressure on other people. We should respect other's drinking capacity and their will.

Hi there. I really appreciate you taking time to send us your composition. I can see that you're already good in writing English and your sentences are easy to understand now. However, there are some minor revisions that I made regarding grammar and sentence construction so that you can have a better sentences the next time you're going to write another composition. Thank you and have a nice day. Yes I think so. >> Yes. I think it's time for us to change our habits.There are lots of bad habits related to the liqour in Korea. >>There are lots of bad habits related to liquor in Korea.When we drink, we sometimes press a alchol on other person who can't drink alchol pretty well.>>When we drink, we sometimes pour the alcohol to the other person who can't drink the alcohol pretty well. They look to like seeing other people got drunk. >>They love to see other people get drunk.When it is a welcome ceremony in Univ, some seniors force a fresh manto drink much alchol at once.>>When there is a welcome ceremony in the University, some seniors force freshmen to drink too much alcohol. Most of the time, a fresh men gets dead drunk.>>Most of the time, freshmen get really drunk. We should notice that it can be very dangerous.>>We should be aware that this can be vey dangerous. Every year , a couple of fresh men die by alchol.>>Every year, some freshmen die because of too much alcohol consumption. And it is a time to change our drinking habit.>>And it is time to change our drinking habit. No more pressure on other people.>> We should not push others to drink. We should respect other's drinking capacity and their will. >>Correct