Do you think it is acceptable to test cosmetics on animals?

2015-07-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

A human is the cruelest animal and the greediest predator. A human is an only animal on earth to kill the other animals not only to feed, but also to use them for various purposes such as making bags, clothes, accessories, health related products or medical research. Humans kill humans as well to conquer or for religious and ethnical conflicts. There are a lot of controversies over the animal testing. Views diverge sharply on whether animal experimentation is part of good science and results in medical breakthroughs for humans, or whether such progress could have been achieved by other means. We often inject a cancer cell into an experimental rat and test a new medicine to test its efficiency and side effects. Such animals will be suffering from the disease and dying in pain. Testing cosmetics on animals is also one of good examples of human’s endless greed. Thinking about if we were used, tested, and killed by the other animals, we could easily realize how cruel our behavior is.

강사 첨삭

It\'s already Thursday Sir [이름]!

Yahoo! I am so happy that you explained your thoughts in writing.

Yes, I totally agree with you.

Human is really cruel.

But I think there are still some people who don\'t kill animals.

Anyway, do you consider yourself as an animal lover?

You can tell me in class.

Teacher Nina


A human is the cruelest animal and the greediest predator.

>> correct

A human is an only animal on earth to kill the other animals not only to feed, but also to use them for various purposes such as making bags, clothes, accessories, health related products or medical research.

>> A human is the only animal on Earth that kill other animals not only to feed, but also to use them for various purposes such as making bags, clothes, accessories, health related products or medical research.

>> OR: He/she is the only animal on Earth that kill other animals not only to feed, but also to use them for various purposes such as making bags, clothes, accessories, health related products or medical research.

Humans kill humans as well to conquer or for religious and ethnical conflicts.

>> correct

There are a lot of controversies over the animal testing.

>> correct

Views diverge sharply on whether animal experimentation is part of good science and results in medical breakthroughs for humans, or whether such progress could have been achieved by other means.

>> correct

We often inject a cancer cell into an experimental rat and test a new medicine to test its efficiency and side effects.

>> correct

Such animals will be suffering from the disease and dying in pain.

>> correct

Testing cosmetics on animals is also one of good examples of human’s endless greed.

>> correct

Thinking about if we were used, tested, and killed by the other animals, we could easily realize how cruel our behavior is.

>> correct 

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