Do you think it is just right to block Chinese people from entering Korea? Why or why not?
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Today, I heard the news which Australia ban foreigners who visit or transport to China to enter their country.
>>Today, I heard the news which Australia banned foreigners who visit or transport from China to enter their country.
Other countries like USA and Japan already conducted this restriction.
>>CORRECT!
I think it is reasonable decision.
>>CORRECT!
First, The first priority of countries is their people not foreigners.
>>CORRECT!
Nation have a duty to protect their people from threaten.
>>Nation has a duty to protect their people from threat.
So, it is natural decision.
>>CORRECT!
Second, we can’t trust China government.
>>CORRECT!
They didn’t give the exact information in the early stage of infection.
>>CORRECT!
And also, they couldn’t cope with infection properly.
>>CORRECT!
So, They lose trust of other countries and we can’t postpone anymore.
>>CORRECT!
Finally, there are many Chineses who are selfish and foolish.
>>CORRECT!
China is serious state and other countries are suffering damage of infection.
>>CORRECT!
Nevertheless, many Chineses go all over the world even hiding their fever as taking a fever reducer.
>>CORRECT!
We don’t want to come disaster like the Black Death again.
>>We don’t want to experience a disaster like the Black Death again.
We should do everything when we can do it.
>> CORRECT!
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