Do you think it is just right to block Chinese people from entering Korea? Why or why not?

2020-02-04 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

학생이 쓴 원문

Today, I heard the news which Australia ban foreigners who visit or transport to China to enter their country. Other countries like USA and Japan already conducted this restriction. I think it is reasonable decision. First, The first priority of countries is their people not foreigners. Nation have a duty to protect their people from threaten. So, it is natural decision. Second, we can’t trust China government. They didn’t give the exact information in the early stage of infection. And also, they couldn’t cope with infection properly. So, They lose trust of other countries and we can’t postpone anymore. Finally, there are many Chineses who are selfish and foolish. China is serious state and other countries are suffering damage of infection. Nevertheless, many Chineses go all over the world even hiding their fever as taking a fever reducer. We don’t want to come disaster like the Black Death again. We should do everything when we can do it.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Se [이름]!

~Teacher Lucy


Today, I heard the news which Australia ban foreigners who visit or transport to China to enter their country.

>>Today, I heard the news which Australia banned foreigners who visit or transport from China to enter their country.

Other countries like USA and Japan already conducted this restriction.

>>CORRECT!

I think it is reasonable decision.
>>CORRECT!
First, The first priority of countries is their people not foreigners.

>>CORRECT!

 Nation have a duty to protect their people from threaten.

>>Nation has a duty to protect their people from threat.

So, it is natural decision.
>>CORRECT!
Second, we can’t trust China government.

>>CORRECT!

They didn’t give the exact information in the early stage of infection.

>>CORRECT!

And also, they couldn’t cope with infection properly.

>>CORRECT!

 So, They lose trust of other countries and we can’t postpone anymore.
>>CORRECT!
Finally, there are many Chineses who are selfish and foolish.

>>CORRECT!
 China is serious state and other countries are suffering damage of infection.

>>CORRECT!

 Nevertheless, many Chineses go all over the world even hiding their fever as taking a fever reducer.
>>CORRECT!
We don’t want to come disaster like the Black Death again.

>>We don’t want to experience a disaster like the Black Death again.

We should do everything when we can do it.

>> CORRECT!

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