Do you think it is more important to make a lot of monry or to enjoy your job?
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name]
I think keeping job is most importance. When I was young, enjoying of job was very important thing which I choiced job. And when I was in middle of 30 ages , a lot of money was important thing to choice a job. Now, I am 51 years old. No more important to make a lot of money in my job. I already have lots of money. So I want to keep my current job.
What I do something for a living, it is a feeling to alive.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! :)
What I do something for a living, it is a feeling to alive.
Thank you for your effort to write a composition.
Have a wonderful day. :)
- Tricia
I think keeping job is most importance.
>> I think keeping my job is the most important.
OR>> I think keeping my job is the most important than making a lot of money.
When I was young, enjoying of job was very important thing which I choiced job.
>> When I was young, an enjoyable working environment was an important factor in choosing a job.
And when I was in middle of 30 ages , a lot of money was important thing to choice a job.
>> And when I was in the mid-\'30s, earning a lot of money was an important factor in choosing a job.
Now, I am 51 years old. No more important to make a lot of money in my job.
>> Now, I am already 51 years old. There\'s no need for me to make a lot of money.
I already have lots of money. So I want to keep my current job.
>> I already have lots of money. So I want to just keep my current job.
What I do something for a living, it is a feeling to alive.
>> What I do something for a living, is a feeling being alive.
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