Do you think it’s better to attend a special event alone or wait until most of your friends can come
학생이 쓴 원문
I think if the event is very important to me, I have to attend the event even alone. Priority of events depends on person. There\'re a lot of events which I want to attend because I think it is helpful. But my friends might don\'t think like me. For example, I usually attend a speech related with education such as \'how to be a professor\' and \' how to write a national proposal\', because it is essential to me. However, this kind of lectures doesn\'t help people who have different dream job. So I think if someone have an special event but don\'t have any partner, he has to go there and gets information from the event. And if possible, he can make new friends who have same interests.
강사 첨삭
Happy Monday, Mary! You explained your opinion clearly and gave a very personal example, which makes your answer relatable and strong. I like how you emphasized the importance of attending meaningful events even alone, and how it can lead to learning and networking. To improve, focus on verb agreement, pronouns, and natural phrasing, especially when switching between singular and plural (he → they). Overall, your reasoning is logical, personal, and very well-explained!
-Teacher Wela
I think if the event is very important to me, I have to attend the event even alone.
>> I think if an event is very important to me, I should attend it even if I am alone.
Priority of events depends on person.
>> The priority of events depends on the person.
There\'re a lot of events which I want to attend because I think it is helpful.
>> There are many events I want to attend because I think they are helpful.
But my friends might don\'t think like me.
>> However, my friends might not feel the same way.
For example, I usually attend a speech related with education such as \'how to be a professor\' and \' how to write a national proposal\', because it is essential to me.
>> For example, I usually attend speeches related to education, such as “How to Be a Professor” and “How to Write a National Proposal,” because they are essential to me.
However, this kind of lectures doesn\'t help people who have different dream job.
>> However, this kind of lecture does not help people with different career goals.
So I think if someone have an special event but don\'t have any partner, he has to go there and gets information from the event.
>> So I think if someone has a special event but no companion, they should go and gain information from it.
And if possible, he can make new friends who have same interests.
>> And if possible, they can make new friends who share the same interests.
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