do you think it’s important for people to play games?
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I definitely don’t think so. This is because there may be more useful ways to spend people’s free time ,and doing outdoor activities has more benefits on people’s life .
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Hi May!
Thanks for sending your homework!
Cheers,
Jean~~
I definitely don’t think so. This is because there may be more useful ways to spend people’s free time ,and doing outdoor activities has more benefits on people’s life.
>> I definitely don’t think so. There may be more useful and worthwhile ways to spend one\'s free time and doing outdoor activities provides more benefits to people.
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