Do you think it\'s important to get physical education in school? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
My dad always told me stamina is very important when you study. I didn\'t understand what he said but now I realized importance of stamina. Nowadays many people work while sitting chair for long time. the more time passes, the more the people who don\'t workout increase. so I think the student should do workout at least in school.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! That\'s true! Physical education is as important as other subjects in school. It should not be neglected. It can help us a lot in terms of keeping fit and being athletic.
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My dad always told me stamina is very important when you study.
>>My dad always told me that stamina is very important when you study.
I didn\'t understand what he said but now I realized importance of stamina.
>>I didn\'t know back then but now I realized importance of stamina.
Nowadays many people work while sitting chair for long time.
>>Nowadays, many people work while sitting on a chair for long time.
the more time passes, the more the people who don\'t workout increase.
>> As time passes, the number of people who don\'t work out increases.
so I think the student should do workout at least in school.
>> So I think that students should work out at least in school.
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