Do you think it\'s necessary to have plastic surgery if you are famous in order to be successful? Wh
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, it\'s unnecessary to have plastic surgery if I am famous.
We don\'t judge the people with their appearances.
The most important thing is how the people think and the personalities of the people.
Because of these reasons, it is unnecessary to have plastic surgery if we are famous.
But we can do it if we want.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Yes, it\'s our character that stands out in a crowd. We need to express self-love and show it to the world.
In my opinion, it\'s unnecessary to have plastic surgery if I am famous.
>> CORRECT
We don\'t judge the people with their appearances.
>> We don\'t judge people based on their appearances.
The most important thing is how the people think and the personalities of the people.
>> The most important thing is how a person thinks and their personality.
Because of these reasons, it is unnecessary to have plastic surgery if we are famous.
>> CORRECT
But we can do it if we want.
>> But we can do it if we want to as well.
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