Do you think it’s necessary to have plastic surgery if you’re famous in order to be successful?

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We’re born from our own parents that God Made a individual person.

>>We’re born from our own parents that God Made an individual person.

 I believe that whatever people were born it was reason.

 >>>I believe that whoever we are, we were born for a reason.
 Black, white, yellow, gray skin colors it does matter God loves everybody.

>>> Correct!
 Nowadays life style c[이름]ged a lot.People depend matrial and visual.

>>> Nowadays our lifestyle c[이름]ged a lot, people depend on material and visual aspects.
 It is not a good way.

>>> Correct!

 I don’t think not necessary to plastic surgery,but people are crazy about plastic Sergery.

>>> I don\'t think it is necessary to have a plastic surgery, but people are crazy about plastic surgery. 

In Korea have a high end plastic sergeon.

>>> In Korea, there are high-end plastic surgeons.

That is why many countries coming to Korea they do Plastic sergery.

>>> A lot of people from other countries come to Korea to have a plastic surgery.

My opinion is little bit is ok.

>>> In my opinion, it is a little bit okay.

 But if people do one time after then they addicted to it.

>>> If people do it once, after that they become addicted to it.
 They do over and over.

>>> They do it over and over again.

Some people had a bad experience.

>>> Some people had bad experiences.
 Beauty is not only out side.

>>> Beauty is not only outside.

We need gain our inside knowledge that means we built self confidence.

>>> We need to gain our inner knowledge, that means we should build self-confidence.
 Everybody have their own talent some people try to 100% some people have many talents but they’did not use their talants. 

>>> Everybody has its own talent, some people try to give 100%, some people have many talents but they don\'t use their talents.

 If everyone work hard it might be successful life I believe.

>>>I believe that if a person works hard that person might be successful in life.