Do you think it’s nice to make predictions and hide them away in a time-capsule?

2020-01-08 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

학생이 쓴 원문

Imagination have happened amazing event. For example, we can go everywhere through airplane. Before 100 years ago, most people laugh to someone who said that we can fly someday. But now, we can fly in the sky. Like this, we can make big development through imagining and predicting our future. We always develop incredible from small curiosity and imagination. Because of this, creativity is important factor to success and countries are trying to effort to cultivate people who have this ability. When I was young, I and my friends imagined and drew our future on sketchbook in school. Something like traveling space is real now, but there are many things not to be real. I want to make prediction and hide away in my time-capsule that we can drive car which fly in the sky like the movie ‘Harry Potter’ after 30 years. I and my peers wish that from our childhood.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Se [이름]!

~Teacher Lucy

Imagination have happened amazing event.

>>Imagination has made amazing events.

For example, we can go everywhere through airplane.

>>CORRECT!

Before 100 years ago, most people laugh to someone who said that we can fly someday.

>>CORRECT!

But now, we can fly in the sky.
>>CORRECT!
Like this, we can make big development through imagining and predicting our future.

>>CORRECT!

We always develop incredible from small curiosity and imagination.

>>CORRECT!

Because of this, creativity is important factor to success and countries are trying to effort to cultivate people who have this ability.
>>Because of this, creativity is important factor to success and countries are trying their effort to cultivate people who have this ability.
When I was young, I and my friends imagined and drew our future on sketchbook in school.

>>CORRECT!

>>When I was young, I and my friends imagined and drew our future on sketchbook at school.

Something like traveling space is real now, but there are many things not to be real.

>>Something like traveling space is real now, but there are many things that\'s not real.

I want to make prediction and hide away in my time-capsule that we can drive car which fly in the sky like the movie ‘Harry Potter’ after 30 years.

>>CORRECT!

I and my peers wish that from our childhood.

>>I and my peers wishes that during our childhood days.

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