Do you think it\'s okay for people to use their cell phones while they are driving in your country?
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Theme: [ESSAY] Do you think it\'s okay for people to use their cell phones while they are driving in your country?
No, I don\'t think so.
Using phones while driving is hard and It\'s dangerous.
When you call with your friends while driving, there would be an axcident.
If you make a phone call while driving, you may be bothered by the phone (sold out of mind) and have an accident.
So I don\'t think It\'s okay to use cell phones while driving. It will be very dangerous!
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Clair!
Here\'s your corrected composition. Fine job!
By the way, please be more mindful of your spelling and capitalization.
Cheers,
Jean~~
Theme: [ESSAY] Do you think it\'s okay for people to use their cell phones while they are driving in your country?
No, I don\'t think so.
>> correct
Using phones while driving is hard and It\'s dangerous.
>> Using phones while driving is hard and dangerous.
>> or: Using phones while driving is hard, distracting, and dangerous.
When you call with your friends while driving, there would be an axcident.
>> Having conversations on the phone with your friends while driving could cause accidents.
If you make a phone call while driving, you may be bothered by the phone (sold out of mind) and have an accident.
>> If you made a phone call while driving, you could get distracted and cause an accident.
So I don\'t think It\'s okay to use cell phones while driving. It will be very dangerous!
>> So I don\'t think it\'s okay to use cell phones while driving because it will be very dangerous!
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