Do you think marijuana should be legal or illegal?

2020-02-18 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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I am curious how I feel if I smoke marijuana. It is not usual to smoke it in Korea. I have seen many celebrities to do it and watched the news about celebrities who received the shots of propofol so prosecutors are investigating a group of celebrities and business leaders on suspicion of illegal drug use. Drug abuse is absolutely illegal in my country and I have same opinion as our citizens agree. I heard that some country allow to drug abuse but I don\'t understand why this countries allow people to use drugs. I think marijuana and all drugs should be illegal because if is not, the crime rate will be increasing and the expense of health care in the countries and world will be increasing too. It is the serious adverse effect. I don\'t know what kind of benefits people can get by using drugs. As I guess, it can reduce the number of addictive people or it is the way to prevent the crime.

강사 첨삭

Happy Tuesday, Mr. [이름]! Thanks for sharing further ideas about the use of marijuana and other illegal drugs.

I hope you don\'t decide to use any. ^^ I\'ll call you tomorrow, Sir. Enjoy! ^^

~T.Avery

I am curious how I feel if I smoke marijuana.

>> I am curious about how I would feel if I smoke marijuana.

It is not usual to smoke it in Korea.

>> CORRECT

I have seen many celebrities to do it and watched the news about celebrities who received the shots of propofol so prosecutors are investigating a group of celebrities and business leaders on suspicion of illegal drug use.

>> I have seen many celebrities do it and watched the news about celebrities who received shots of propofol, so prosecutors are investigating a group of celebrities and business leaders under suspicion of illegal drug use.

Drug abuse is absolutely illegal in my country and I have same opinion as our citizens agree.

>> Drug abuse is absolutely illegal in my country and I have the same opinion as majority of our citizens.

I heard that some country allow to drug abuse but I don\'t understand why this countries allow people to use drugs.

>> I heard that some countries allow the use of drugs but I don\'t understand why these countries allow people to use drugs.

I think marijuana and all drugs should be illegal because if is not, the crime rate will be increasing and the expense of health care in the countries and world will be increasing too.

>> CORRECT

It is the serious adverse effect.

>> CORRECT

I don\'t know what kind of benefits people can get by using drugs.

>> CORRECT

As I guess, it can reduce the number of addictive people or it is the way to prevent the crime.

>> I guess it can reduce the number of addicted people or it may be a way to prevent crime. 

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