Do you think marriage is important? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, marriage is important.
If people don\'t marry, we can\'t continue our humans\' history.
So I think marriage is important for the humans\' history, and for the people who will live after us.
And also there is another function of marriage.
We can earn money together if we marry, so we can be more comfortable about money.
And also I think of course we can marry with our loving ones.
Even though I don\'t think that marriage is not important, I can\'t urge my opinion.
But I think marriage is important in my life, and also I think it is a good thing.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]:)
That\'s true. It\'s a personal choice so we should respect everyone\'s opinion.
In my opinion, marriage is important.
>> CORRECT
If people don\'t marry, we can\'t continue our humans\' history.
>>If people don\'t marry, we can\'t continue our history.
So I think marriage is important for the humans\' history, and for the people who will live after us.
>> So I think marriage is important for the next generations.
And also there is another function of marriage.
>> There are also other functions for marriage.
We can earn money together if we marry, so we can be more comfortable about money.
>> We can earn money together if we marry, so we can live more comfortably.
And also I think of course we can marry with our loving ones.
>> Also, I think we can get married for our loved ones.
Even though I don\'t think that marriage is not important, I can\'t urge my opinion.
>> Even though I don\'t think that marriage is not important, I can\'t urge other people to feel think the same way.
But I think marriage is important in my life, and also I think it is a good thing.
>> At some point, I think marriage is important and good in my life.
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