Do you think mass media should be completely free to say whatever it wants?

2017-12-01 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Before now, two of previous presidents have controlled mass media during their period time. For example, when mass media had wanted to announce regarding the government issues, they have checked and then blocked or fired a person who was a C.E.O in a media company. Furthermore, it’s not only broadcast but also actors and comedians. After Mr.Song who is a celebrity in the world owing to the 'Snowpiercer ‘also took a film ‘The Attorney, 2013’, he was put on the black list and blocked by the government. Hence, he couldn’t contract with a director who wanted to make a movie with him more than 5 years although he is a nice and named actor. Moreover, when comedians had criticized about the bad point of the government, they have abolished that program with their director. If they control as this, citizen might not know about real problems. Consequently, they will be as a blinder. Hence, I wish this government is not same as before since it's a Republic of Korea not a same as North Korea

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Jason^^

I hope the media could show nothing but the truth, since it is their responsibility to observe transparency^^

Have a great day!

Before now, two of previous presidents have controlled mass media during their period time.

>>Previously, two of the previous presidents controlled our mass media during their time.

For example, when mass media had wanted to announce regarding the government issues, they have checked and then blocked or fired a person who was a C.E.O in a media company.

>>For example, when mass media wanted to announce government issues, they checked and then blocked or fired a person who was a C.E.O in a media company.

Furthermore, it’s not only broadcast but also actors and comedians.

>>CORRECT!

After Mr.Song who is a celebrity in the world owing to the \'Snowpiercer ‘also took a film ‘The Attorney, 2013’, he was put on the black list and blocked by the government.

>>After Mr. [Name] ,who is a world celebrity owing to the \'Snowpiercer\', also took a film ‘The Attorney, 2013’, he was put on the black list and was blocked by the government.

Hence, he couldn’t contract with a director who wanted to make a movie with him more than 5 years although he is a nice and named actor.

>>CORRECT!

Moreover, when comedians had criticized about the bad point of the government, they have abolished that program with their director.

>>Moreover, when comedians had criticized the bad point of the government, they abolished that program with their director.

If they control as this, citizen might not know about real problems.

>>If they control it like this, citizens might not know the real problems.

Consequently, they will be as a blinder.

>>Consequently, they will be a blinder.

Hence, I wish this government is not same as before since it\'s a Republic of Korea not a same as North Korea.

>>Hence, I wish this government is not the same as before since it\'s the Republic of Korea and not the same as North Korea.

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