Do you think mobile telephones are dangerous in any way?

2024-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I think mobile telephones are the most useful device for us in many ways. However, electronic micro waves like blue light from them are harmful for us. I read a news that Blue light causes eye dryness, fatigue and even cancer . So, it\'s better to use them effectively.

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I think mobile telephones are the most useful device for us in many ways.
>> I think mobile telephones are the most useful devices for us in many ways.
However, electronic micro waves like blue light from them are harmful for us.
>> Correct
I read a news that Blue light causes eye dryness, fatigue and even cancer .
>> I read some news that Blue light causes eye dryness, fatigue and even cancer.
So, it\'s better to use them effectively.
>> Correct

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