Do you think modern technology (like video calls) can replace in-person family gatherings?
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Hi, Mary! Your answer about technology and family gatherings was thoughtful and well explained. You clearly expressed the differences between online communication and real in-person interactions. I also liked how you mentioned the future possibilities of VR, that was a creative and logical point. Keep practicing expressing your opinions like this. You\'re improving your clarity and confidence each lesson.
-Teacher Wela
If we have no choice to meet in-person, we\'ll meet on-line,
>> If we have no choice but to meet in person, we will use online calls instead.
But, I don\'t think that modern technology can replace in-person family gathering.
>> However, I don\'t think modern technology can replace in-person family gatherings.
Family gathering includes sharing food, playing game, and taking.
>> Family gatherings include sharing food, playing games, and talking.
Though we can see each other on screen using on-line video call, we can\'t eat together and touch.
>> Although we can see each other on screen through online video calls, we cannot eat together or physically interact.
If the technology improve as much as we can meet on Virtual Reality, I think it can replace family gathering.
>> If technology improves enough for us to meet realistically through virtual reality, I think it might replace family gatherings.
In high-tech VR, we can touch and feel each other, playing game, talking, even traveling, except eating.
>> In advanced VR, we might be able to touch, feel, play games, talk, and even travel together, everything except eating.
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