Do you think modern technology reduces or increases stress? Why?

2021-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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I think modern technology has pros and cons equally. For example, I can transfer the money through a phone easily but on the other hand a voice call fraud has been increased. Also we can send the message to my friend and family members with a cute emoticon. But a boss or manager in a company can talk easily via a message even after working time. Even if there are many advantages and disadvantages to use modern electronic, I think an advantage is more. I can not imagine to live without a phone.

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Exactly, [이름]! They really have a lot of advantages though there are disadvantages. But still it\'s up to us if we want to be controlled by them or we control them. See you!-Faith-
I think modern technology has pros and cons equally. 
>> CORRECT
For example, I can transfer the money through a phone easily but on the other hand a voice call fraud has been increased. 
>> For example, I can transfer money through a phone easily but on the other hand, cases of a voice call fraud has increased. 
Also we can send the message to my friend and family members with a cute emoticon. 
>> Also, we can send a message to our friends and family members with a cute emoticon. 
But a boss or manager in a company can talk easily via a message even after working time. 
>> But a boss or manager in a company can contact easily with their employees via a message even after working time. 
Even if there are many advantages and disadvantages to use modern electronic, I think an advantage is more. 
>> Even if there are many disadvantages of using modern technology, I think there are still more advantages.
I can not imagine to live without a phone.
>> I cannot imagine living without a phone.

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