Do you think money can buy happiness?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, money can not buy happiness.
But, we need some money to be happy.
I think in other word of happiness is "satisfy".
People can feel happy, when they are satisfied with their life.
To be satisfied with one's life, we need not only clothes, foods,
house, but enjoying a culture life. And now a days, we never take
all of these things without money.
So money is not only thing to be happy. But money is the most
important thing to be happy.
강사 첨삭
Hi!!!
I think you have very ineteresting and realistic idea about happines.
And I do hope that in the future you can find happiness.
Teacher Chelsea
In my opinion, money can not buy happiness.
>>CORRECTBut, we need some money to be happy.
>>Correct OR But, we need money to be happy.I think in other word of happiness is \"satisfy\".
>>I think that happines also means \"satisfy\".People can feel happy, when they are satisfied with their life.
>>People can feel happines when they are satisfied with their life.To be satisfied with one\'s life, we need not only clothes, foods,house, but enjoying a culture life.
>> DO YOU MEAN TO SAY: To be satisfied with one\'s life, we need not only clothes, food and a house, but also to enjoy a very good lifestyle.
And now a days, we never take all of these things without money.
>>And nowadays, we can never get any of these things without money.So money is not only thing to be happy. But money is the most important thing to be happy.
>>So, money is not the only thing we need to be happy, but money is the most important thing to achieve happines.
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