Do you think money can have a negative effect on people? In what way?
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I think that money can have some negative effects on people. First, they can make people focus on it. So they can\'t live normal life. Also, people can be in danger because of the robber and thief. The money makes people live better life but it can also make people feel anxious.
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I think that money can have some negative effects on people.
>> correct
First, they can make people focus on it.
>> First, it can make people focus too much on it or become obsessed with it.
So they can\'t live normal life.
>> So they can\'t live normal lives.
Also, people can be in danger because of the robber and thief.
>> Also, people can be in danger because of robbers and thieves.
The money makes people live better life but it can also make people feel anxious.
>> Money makes people live better lives but it can also make them feel anxious.
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