Do you think money is more important than love? What qualities must a person have to make BIG money?
학생이 쓴 원문
I can say that money is not more important than love, however, money plays a significant role in making the love relationship stronger.The feeling of love could be monentary and does not last forever without being taking care of well.The love relationship is affected by a lot of internal and external factors and the financial difficulty is one of the main reasons for the break-up of couples.Especially, when couples seek marriage as the ultimate destination of their love, money becomes reality that cannot be overlooked. Taking a look at divorce rate, the difficult home economy marks the second or third reason of the divorce.To make big money, people should have a good sense of economy and finance. He/She should have a foresight of how economic situation will change and evolve. In addition, he/she should be bold and quick enough in making a decision once he analyzed relevant data and convinced himself of success. He/she should be risk seeking, rather than risk neutral or risk averse.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Sir [이름]!
Happy start of the week.
Thank you for doing your essay.
I agree that money plays a vital role in relationships.
However, we should know how to prioritize things.
Have a wonderful day. Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina
I can say that money is not more important than love, however, money plays a significant role in making the love relationship stronger.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: I can say that money is less important than love, however, money plays a significant role in making the love relationship stronger.
The feeling of love could be monentary and does not last forever without being taking care of well.
>> Did you mean: The feeling of love could be monentary and does not last forever without being well taking cared of.
The love relationship is affected by a lot of internal and external factors and the financial difficulty is one of the main reasons for the break-up of couples.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: The love /relationship is affected by a lot of internal and external factors and the financial difficulty is one of the main reasons why couples separate.
Especially, when couples seek marriage as the ultimate destination of their love, money becomes reality that cannot be overlooked.
>> CORRECT
Taking a look at divorce rate, the difficult home economy marks the second or third reason of the divorce.
>> CORRECT
To make big money, people should have a good sense of economy and finance.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: To earn big money, people should have a good sense of economy and finance.
He/She should have a foresight of how economic situation will change and evolve.
>> CORRECT
In addition, he/she should be bold and quick enough in making a decision once he analyzed relevant data and convinced himself of success.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: In addition, he/she should be bold and quick enough in making a decision. Once he analyzed the relevant data and convinced himself of success.
He/she should be risk seeking, rather than risk neutral or risk averse.
>> CORRECT
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