Do you think music festivals are worth attending even if they are expensive? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Someone may think attending music festivals is worth, but I don\'t think that.
I like listening music, but not too much.
I\'ve never thought that I want to go to a concert and listen to music in live.
I prefer to listen to music in my daily life like when I am driving, taking a walk and having a dinner with my wife.
But I think I should go to a music festival someday. Because my wife want it.
강사 첨삭
Happy Friday, [이름] [이름]! Your answer feels natural and personal, which makes it engaging and easy to understand. I like how you explained your personal preference for listening to music in everyday situations rather than attending large events, and ending with your wife’s preference adds a nice, relatable touch. Your reasoning is clear and realistic. To improve, focus on prepositions like \"listening to music,\" subject-verb agreement (\"wife wants\"), and smoother sentence connections. Overall, your response is clear, personal, and well-expressed, great job!
-Teacher Wela
Someone may think attending music festivals is worth, but I don\'t think that.
>> Some people may think attending music festivals is worth it, but I don’t think so.
I like listening music, but not too much.
>> I like listening to music, but not too much.
I\'ve never thought that I want to go to a concert and listen to music in live.
>> I’ve never thought that I wanted to go to a concert and listen to music live.
I prefer to listen to music in my daily life like when I am driving, taking a walk and having a dinner with my wife.
>> I prefer to listen to music in my daily life, such as when I am driving, taking a walk, or having dinner with my wife.
But I think I should go to a music festival someday. Because my wife want it.
>> However, I think I should go to a music festival someday because my wife wants to go.
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