Do you think napping during the day is helpful or a waste of time?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think proper napping during the day help us relax and prevent overloading. If we don\'t sleep when we feel sleepy, we can\'t focus our work and finally nod off. Proper napping means that we take a nap upto 30 minutes. If the time is over, we might feel drowsy and ruin that day.
However, there is special case such as girls\' period. At that time, girls uaually feel tired and sleepy, and they should take a nap and relax enough.
강사 첨삭
You explained your opinion clearly, and your ideas were easy to understand. I like how you defined what “proper napping” means and explained both the benefits and the possible negative effects if a nap is too long. Your example about special situations, such as feeling unusually tired, shows thoughtful and realistic thinking. To improve your writing, try to focus on subject–verb agreement (for example, “napping helps”), using more natural expressions (“up to 30 minutes,” “ruin the rest of the day”), and smoothing some sentences so they flow better. Overall, this is a well-structured response with good reasoning, keep up the good work!
-Teacher Wela
I think proper napping during the day help us relax and prevent overloading.
>> I think proper napping during the day helps us relax and prevents overload.
If we don\'t sleep when we feel sleepy, we can\'t focus our work and finally nod off.
>> If we don’t rest when we feel sleepy, we can’t focus on our work and may eventually nod off.
Proper napping means that we take a nap upto 30 minutes.
>> Proper napping means taking a nap for up to 30 minutes
If the time is over, we might feel drowsy and ruin that day.
>> If the nap lasts longer, we might feel drowsy and ruin the rest of the day.
However, there is special case such as girls\' period.
>> However, there are special cases, such as during menstruation.
At that time, girls uaually feel tired and sleepy, and they should take a nap and relax enough.
>> At that time, women usually feel tired and sleepy, so they should take naps and get enough rest.
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