Do you think our lives have been improved by the Internet?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I do. First, through Internet, we can get many kinds of knowledges. It means we can talk about more kinds of topics. We can exchange our own opinions and be developed. Second, there are many programs on the Internet like news, time table of vehicles and so on. Through these, we can know about happenings and use vehicles more comfortably. Internet will be improved over and over again, and we will be able to live a more comfortable life.
강사 첨삭
Hello Kimberly!
Thank you so much for sharing your opinion with me about this question. I agree with your idea. Keep up the good work!
-Teacher Erin^^
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Yes, I do.
>>correct.
First, through Internet, we can get many kinds of knowledges.
>>First, through the internet, we can get many types of information.
It means we can talk about more kinds of topics.
>>It means, we can talk about everything and we can learn a lot of topics.
We can exchange our own opinions and be developed.
>>We can spread information and talk about it with other people.
Second, there are many programs on the Internet like news, timetable of vehicles and so on.
>>correct.
Through these, we can know about happenings and use vehicles more comfortably.
>>Through these, we will get updated about what is happening in society and we can move comfortably.
Internet will be improved over and over again, and we will be able to live a more comfortable life.
>>Internet will improve through the years, and we will be able to live a more comfortable life.
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