do you think our lives have been improved by the internet?
학생이 쓴 원문
i think so. there may be several improvements in our lives by the internet. first, i would like to mention about a time efficiency which made our lives easier than in the past. That is to say as when people shop they can order by on-line, people can save their times.
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Hi there, May!
Thanks again for sending your homework.
Cheers,
Jean
i think so.
>> As I see it, that\'s a resounding yes.
there may be several improvements in our lives by the internet.
>> There may be several improvements in our lives thanks to the emergence of the internet.
first, i would like to mention about a time efficiency which made our lives easier than in the past.
>> First, I\'d like to mention the efficiency that it brings us, which definitely makes our lives easier.
That is to say as when people shop they can order by on-line, people can save their times.
>> That is to say, when people do their shopping online, they can save time.
>> or: That is to say, people can save time when they shop online.
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