Do you think our money is safe in the bank? Why?

2018-06-29 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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My answer is yes on this agenda. I have saved up money since I got a job, and put the money in the bank. In this way, I get interests added to my savings, which is better than keeping it at home without advantages of the value of money. Also, it's safer than having money somewhere because I might forget the location or there might be people who keep their eyes on my money. In Korea, we have a law that protects depositors with under 20,000 dollars on saving accounts. Therefore, even if banks go bankrupt, the money we save up is protected and guaranteed by the government. Plus, I can have benefits using credit or debit cards related to my bank accounts. Banks give us cash back or points or discounts at associated stores or restaurants. Overall, keeping money in the bank is safe and has a lot of benefits.

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My answer is yes on this agenda.
>>> Correct! 

I have saved up money since I got a job, and put the money in the bank.
>>> Correct!

In this way, I get interests added to my savings, which is better than keeping it at home without advantages of the value of money.
>>> Correct!

Also, it\'s safer than having money somewhere because I might forget the location or there might be people who keep their eyes on my money.

>>> Also, it\'s safer than having money somewhere because I might forget the location, or there might be people who keep their eyes on my money.
In Korea, we have a law that protects depositors with under 20,000 dollars on saving accounts.
>>> Correct!

Therefore, even if banks go bankrupt, the money we save up is protected and guaranteed by the government.
>>> Therefore, even if the banks go bankrupt, the money we save up is protected and guaranteed by the government.

Plus, I can have benefits using credit or debit cards related to my bank accounts.
>>> Correct! 

Banks give us cash back or points or discounts at associated stores or restaurants.
>>>
Banks give us cash back, points or discounts at associated stores or restaurants. 

Overall, keeping money in the bank is safe and has a lot of benefits.

>>> Correct!   

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