Do you think our money is safe in the bank? Why?
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My answer is yes on this agenda.
>>> Correct!
I have saved up money since I got a job, and put the money in the bank.
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In this way, I get interests added to my savings, which is better than keeping it at home without advantages of the value of money.
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Also, it\'s safer than having money somewhere because I might forget the location or there might be people who keep their eyes on my money.
>>> Also, it\'s safer than having money somewhere because I might forget the location, or there might be people who keep their eyes on my money.
In Korea, we have a law that protects depositors with under 20,000 dollars on saving accounts.
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Therefore, even if banks go bankrupt, the money we save up is protected and guaranteed by the government.
>>> Therefore, even if the banks go bankrupt, the money we save up is protected and guaranteed by the government.
Plus, I can have benefits using credit or debit cards related to my bank accounts.
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Banks give us cash back or points or discounts at associated stores or restaurants.
>>> Banks give us cash back, points or discounts at associated stores or restaurants.
Overall, keeping money in the bank is safe and has a lot of benefits.
>>> Correct!
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