Do you think our obsession with capturing moments through smartphones diminishes the quality of thos

2024-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jenna

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I think so. I think suitability is important to everything. Capturing moments is important and it could bring us precious memories in the future. But still, If we spend to much time to take photos or recording the scene, it feels like we sacrifice the present for the future we don\'t know when it could be. In this way, there would be few times we live in the moment.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Ms. [이름]! Great thoughts! You made an interesting point about balancing the present and future. It’s true that while capturing memories is valuable, we shouldn’t lose sight of the moment we’re living in. Keep up the good work!

~T. Jenna

I think so. I think suitability is important to everything.

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>>I agree. I believe that suitability is key to everything.
Capturing moments is important and it could bring us precious memories in the future.

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>>Documenting moments holds significant value, as it can bestow upon us treasured memories that will endure over time.
But still, If we spend to much time to take photos or recording the scene, it feels like we sacrifice the present for the future we don\'t know when it could be.

>>But still, if we spend too much time taking photos or recording the scene, it feels like we sacrifice the present for a future we don\'t know when it will be.

>> But still, if we spend too much time snapping photos or recording the scene, it feels like we’re trading the present for an uncertain future.
In this way, there would be few times we live in the moment.

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>>In this manner, opportunities to fully embrace the present would be scarce.

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