Do you think parents nowadays are different from parents in the past? Why or why not?

2022-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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In my opinion, parents nowadays are different from parents in the past. First, they have less conversations with their children. Because of this reason, some of my friends don\'t like to talk with their parents. Second, they think about their children\'s study too much. So my friends sometimes get too much stress about their study. And the last one, they try to stop playing outside. Because of this, as we get older and older, there is no time to play with our friends. Because of these reasons, I think parents nowadays are different from parents in the past.

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In my opinion, parents nowadays are different from parents in the past.
>> CORRECT

First, they have less conversations with their children.
>> CORRECT

Because of this reason, some of my friends don\'t like to talk with their parents.
>> CORRECT

Second, they think about their children\'s study too much.
>> Second, they think about their children\'s education too much.

So my friends sometimes get too much stress about their study.
>> This is why my friends sometimes get too much stress about their study.

And the last one, they try to stop playing outside.
>> 
And the last one is that they try to stop them from playing outside.

Because of this, as we get older and older, there is no time to play with our friends.
>>As we get older and older, there is no time to play with our friends.

Because of these reasons, I think parents nowadays are different from parents in the past.
>> CORRECT

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