Do you think people can stay economically active even after retirement? How?
학생이 쓴 원문
Rising life expectancy led people to seek job after retirement. However, it became challenging for them to stay economically active after retirement. The most important reason is the dearth in job market. There is not enough job for everyone. Due to economic uncertainties and difficulties, companies are not hiring as much as they used to do. There are not enough jobs for recent graduates, and many middle managers are forced to resign. Then there are rapidly increasing technology. Rising use of artificial intelligence led companies to seek more efficiency and focus their talent on who can utilize this technology adeptly. Since older generations can have difficulties using high tech, it would be challenging for them to stay at work. Finally, there is a structural problem. Especially in East Asia, managers would not want to hire someone older than they are. This is because we were taught to be polite to elderly people and it is difficult to be polite to your own subordinates.
강사 첨삭
Thanks for this as well, Aciel! Have a good one.
Rising life expectancy led people to seek jobs after retirement.
>>> correct
However, it became challenging for them to stay economically active after retirement. >>> correct
The most important reason is the dearth in job market. There is not enough job for everyone.
>>> The most important reason is the shortage in the job market—there are not enough jobs for everyone.
Due to economic uncertainties and difficulties, companies are not hiring as much as they used to do.
>>> correct
There are not enough jobs for recent graduates, and many middle managers are forced to resign.
>>> correct
Then there are rapidly increasing technology.
>>> Then, there is the rapidly increasing use of technology.
Rising use of artificial intelligence led companies to seek more efficiency and focus their talent on who can utilize this technology adeptly.
>>> OR: The rise of artificial intelligence has led companies to focus on efficiency and seek talent who can use this technology adeptly.
Since older generations can have difficulties using high tech, it would be challenging for them to stay at work.
>>> Since older generations may have difficulties using high-tech tools, it is challenging for them to stay in the workforce.
Finally, there is a structural problem.
>>> correct
Especially in East Asia, managers would not want to hire someone older than they are.
>>> OR: Especially in East Asia, managers often do not want to hire someone older than themselves.
This is because we were taught to be polite to elderly people and it is difficult to be polite to your own subordinates.
>>> correct
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