Do you think people greet less now because of technology?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it became rather easy to greet due to technology.
You can greet and say hello to someone via SNS or messenger.
Nowadays it looks people less greet than past.
I think it\'s because of absence of etiquette education issue, not because of technology.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] [이름]! You shared a clear and thoughtful opinion on how technology affects greetings. I like how you explained that technology actually makes greeting easier through SNS and messaging apps, rather than simply bla[이름]g it for reduced face-to-face greetings. Your reasoning was logical, especially when you pointed out that the real issue may be the lack of etiquette education. This shows good critical thinking and the ability to look beyond surface-level causes. To improve further, you can work on making your sentences sound more natural and fluent, especially when talking about changes over time. Overall, this was a well-structured response with a strong and mature viewpoint. Keep it up!
-Teacher Wela
-Teacher Wela
I think it became rather easy to greet due to technology.
>> I think it has become rather easy to greet due to technology.
You can greet and say hello to someone via SNS or messenger.
>> You can greet and say hello to someone via SNS or a messenger app.
Nowadays it looks people less greet than past.
>> Nowadays, it looks like people greet less than in the past.
I think it\'s because of absence of etiquette education issue, not because of technology.
>> I think this is because of a lack of etiquette education, not because of technology.
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