Do you think people/humans are too dependent on technology?
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Yes, I definitely believe that many people who are living in modern society are too dependent on technology. That\'s because that they are always exposed to the technology in their daily life. As technology has improved a lot, many things that people can use such as smart phone and laptop come out. So, they are really convenient and easy for people to use, which can help their quality of life to improve. Take a example, people can buy everything and keep in touch with everyone online. For this reason, they might well rely on the technology. In addition, because of the Covid-19, nowadays contactless technology has made great strides because people cannot come in contact in person and go outside freely. People always live with technology in modern society so I believe that it is an inevitable result that people depend on technology a lot.
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Thank you for this [이름] [이름]. Very well said.
- T. Beth
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Yes, I definitely believe that many people who are living in modern society are too dependent on technology. >>>> correct
That\'s because that they are always exposed to the technology in their daily life.
>>>> That\'s because they are always exposed to the technology in their daily life.
As technology has improved a lot, many things that people can use such as smart phone and laptop come out.
>>>> As technology has improved a lot, many things that people can use such as smart phone and laptop came out.
So, they are really convenient and easy for people to use, which can help their quality of life to improve.
>>>> correct
Take a example, people can buy everything and keep in touch with everyone online.
>>>> Take for example, people can buy everything and keep in touch with everyone online.
For this reason, they might well rely on the technology.
>>>> OR: For this reason, they might as well rely on the technology.
In addition, because of the Covid-19, nowadays contactless technology has made great strides because people cannot come in contact in person and go outside freely.
>>>> correct
People always live with technology in modern society so I believe that it is an inevitable result that people depend on technology a lot.
>>>> correct
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