Do you think people nowadays value love more than commitment in marriage? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it depends on person. There is someone who get marriage only with love. But I think if someone has enough mature thinking, he will choose commitment than love. I think, in our past relationship, we experienced a lot of hurtful situation when we start a relationship only with love. After that, we might realize that we need to meet mature person who can respect each other and understand commitments. Therefore, I think people usually choose the commitment than love after several past experiences.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Mary! Your answer shows mature and thoughtful reasoning about relationships and marriage. I like how you explained that personal experiences can change people’s priorities from romantic feelings to long-term commitment and mutual respect. This gives your response emotional depth and realism. Your ideas are logically connected and easy to follow. To improve, focus on article usage (“a mature person”), natural expressions like “choose commitment over love,” and smoother sentence structures. Overall, your response is reflective, balanced, and meaningful, great job!
-Teacher Wela
I think it depends on person.
>> I think it depends on the person.
There is someone who get marriage only with love.
>> Some people get married only for love.
But I think if someone has enough mature thinking, he will choose commitment than love.
>> But I think that if someone is mature enough, they will choose commitment over love.
I think, in our past relationship, we experienced a lot of hurtful situation when we start a relationship only with love.
>> I think that in past relationships, many people experience hurtful situations when they start a relationship based only on love.
After that, we might realize that we need to meet mature person who can respect each other and understand commitments.
>> After that, we might realize that we need to meet a mature person who can respect others and understand commitment.
Therefore, I think people usually choose the commitment than love after several past experiences.
>> Therefore, I think people usually choose commitment over love after several past experiences.
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