Do you think people rely too much on computers?
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I think that people rely too much on computers. Look at the living of people at the CoronaVirus Pandemic. They use most of time in computer. It shows how people rely on computers.
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I think that people rely too much on computers.
>> correct
>> or: As I see it, people rely too much on computers.
Look at the living of people at the CoronaVirus Pandemic.
>> Look at the way people are living their lives during this coronavirus pandemic.
They use most of time in computer.
>> They use or waste most of their time on computers.
It shows how people rely on computers.
>> correct
>> or: This just shows how much people rely on computers.
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