Do you think people should be paid more for working on weekends? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think people should be paid more for working on weekends.
Most people work on weekdays.
Therefore, we don\'t have enough time to enjoy outdoor activites with our loved ones on weekdays.
That\'s the reason why weekends are important to us.
We can only enjoy outdoor activites with our loved ones for relaxing on weekends.
Some people who felt exhausted with busy work hours can have a relaxing weekend by doing nothing or sleeping enough.
Many people are struggling with insomnia nowadays, so they sometimes have brain fog in work hours.
If they sleep enough on weekend, they can start a fresh weekday and it has a positive effect on work hours.
In conclustion, we should be paid more for woking on weekends because weekends are so valuable to us.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
You did a great job explaining your opinion clearly! I like how you gave good reasons why weekends are so important for rest and spending time with loved ones. Your writing shows thoughtful ideas and strong organization. Just keep working on polishing small grammar points, but overall, you’re improving so well. Keep it up!
~Teacher Polly
>>CORRECT
Most people work on weekdays.
Therefore, we don\'t have enough time to enjoy outdoor activites with our loved ones on weekdays.
>>Most people work on weekdays, so we don’t have enough time to enjoy outdoor activities with our loved ones during that time.
That\'s the reason why weekends are important to us.
>>CORRECT
We can only enjoy outdoor activites with our loved ones for relaxing on weekends.
>>We can only enjoy outdoor activities and relax with our loved ones on weekends.
Some people who felt exhausted with busy work hours can have a relaxing weekend by doing nothing or sleeping enough.
>>Some people who feel exhausted from their busy work schedules can have a relaxing weekend by doing nothing or getting enough sleep.
Many people are struggling with insomnia nowadays, so they sometimes have brain fog in work hours.
>>Many people struggle with insomnia nowadays, so they sometimes experience brain fog during work hours.
If they sleep enough on weekend, they can start a fresh weekday and it has a positive effect on work hours.
>>If they get enough rest on weekends, they can start the new week feeling fresh, which can have a positive effect on their performance at work.
In conclustion, we should be paid more for woking on weekends because weekends are so valuable to us.
>>In conclusion, we should be paid more for working on weekends because weekends are very valuable to us.
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