Do you think people who exercise are happier than those who don\'t?
학생이 쓴 원문
Many people take care of themselves by exercising.
Most people who exercise have a more pleasant and brighter energy than those who don’t exercise.
Because I think exercise relieve their stress, secreted hormones give good effects and the physical strength and patience from exercising make them not easily lose their smile.
On the other hand, people who don’t exercise seem to lose their smile quickly because they get tired easily.
So, Let’s not lose our smile easily through exercise and live our lives more energetically!
강사 첨삭
Thank you for tis Philip. I completely support this opinion of yours. Since I have personally experienced the benefits of exercising, I can attest to it.
Many people take care of themselves by exercising.
>>> correct
Most people who exercise have a more pleasant and brighter energy than those who don’t exercise.
>>> correct
Because I think exercise relieve their stress, secreted hormones give good effects and the physical strength and patience from exercising make them not easily lose their smile.
>>> I think it\'s because exercising relieves their stress, secreted hormones give good effects and the physical strength and patience from exercising make them not easily lose their smiles.
On the other hand, people who don’t exercise seem to lose their smile quickly because they get tired easily.
>>> correct
So, Let’s not lose our smile easily through exercise and live our lives more energetically!
>>> correct
Most people who exercise have a more pleasant and brighter energy than those who don’t exercise.
>>> correct
Because I think exercise relieve their stress, secreted hormones give good effects and the physical strength and patience from exercising make them not easily lose their smile.
>>> I think it\'s because exercising relieves their stress, secreted hormones give good effects and the physical strength and patience from exercising make them not easily lose their smiles.
On the other hand, people who don’t exercise seem to lose their smile quickly because they get tired easily.
>>> correct
So, Let’s not lose our smile easily through exercise and live our lives more energetically!
>>> correct
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