Do you think playing video games are bad for kids? Why or why not?
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I think there are adventages and disadventages to playing video games for kids.
For the adventage, they can solve their stresses with playing video games.
We can get sense of accomplishment if we get some items in the video games.
And their are a lot of studies that students have to do, so students have a lot of stresses.
But there are disadventages to playing video games.
Our organs like eyes or ears can be unhealthy because of screen and ear phone.
And some games are so addictive so some students can be addicted in video games.
So I think we can\'t judge video games as bad or good thing.
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>> I think there are advantages and disadvantages in kids playing video games.
For the adventage, they can solve their stresses with playing video games.
>> One of the advantage is that it can release the stress of children .
We can get sense of accomplishment if we get some items in the video games.
>> CORRECT
And their are a lot of studies that students have to do, so students have a lot of stresses.
>> Usually students have a lot of stress because of school.
But there are disadventages to playing video games.
>>Despite all that, there are also some disadvantages.
Our organs like eyes or ears can be unhealthy because of screen and ear phone.
>> Our eyes and ears can be affected because of the screens and earphones.
And some games are so addictive so some students can be addicted in video games.
>> And some games are so addictive so some students tend to become addicted.
So I think we can\'t judge video games as bad or good thing.
>> CORRECT
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