Do you think renting can make life easier or more stressful? Explain.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think renting make life more stressful. Because if we rent something, we have to pay to owner proper price. For example, if we rent the house, we have to pay it every month or every year. However, when the contract is finished, there isn\'t anything to leave. That means we just consume our money. If we buy the house, we don\'t need to care paying every month and deadline of contract. And the house price may be increased when we want to move other place. At that time it leaves profits to us.
강사 첨삭
Happy Friday, Mary! Your answer clearly explains why renting can be more stressful than buying, using concrete examples like houses, payments, and contracts. You show logical reasoning and compare the financial implications of renting versus owning, which makes your argument persuasive. To improve, pay attention to grammar issues such as subject-verb agreement (“renting makes” instead of “renting make”), prepositions (“pay the owner” instead of “pay to owner”), and word choice for clarity (“nothing left for us” instead of “isn’t anything to leave”). Smoother transitions between sentences would also make your explanation easier to follow. Overall, your ideas are strong and well-structured, but refining grammar and phrasing will make your answer more polished and fluent.
-Teacher Wela
Because if we rent something, we have to pay to owner proper price.
>> If we rent something, we have to pay the owner a proper price.
For example, if we rent the house, we have to pay it every month or every year.
>> For example, if we rent a house, we have to pay every month or every year.
However, when the contract is finished, there isn\'t anything to leave.
>> However, when the contract ends, there is nothing left for us.
That means we just consume our money.
>> That means we are just spending our money without gaining anything.
If we buy the house, we don\'t need to care paying every month and deadline of contract.
>> If we buy a house, we don’t have to worry about paying every month or the contract deadline.
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