Do you think scientists will produce a mechanical heart one day that will be able to work forever?

2019-04-08 · 첨삭 강사 May

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I strongly believe that scientists will invent a mechanical heart that will be able to work forever. There is nothing that people can\'t do. We have a lot of experience that impossible things happened as time went by. For example, we didn\'t expect that we would use a mobile phone and smart phone. However, engineer and inventor finally showed the new technology for customers. As I know, many doctors and scientists have studied about a artificial heart and have published their research results. We can easily meet the patient who has a cardiac pacemaker. I think that It\'s a kind of mechanical heart. If it will happen, a lot of patients can be treated. However, researchers must have a lot of trials to animals before they implement a mechanical heart to the public. I hope that nobody have a serious disease and can be treated by new treatment.

강사 첨삭

Hello! How are you [이름]? You know, nothing is impossible to happen if people work hard. ^^
~~May~~
I strongly believe that scientists will invent a mechanical heart that will be able to work forever.
There is nothing that people can\'t do. 
>> CORRECT
We have a lot of experience that impossible things happened as time went by.
>> We have a lot of experiences that even impossible things happened as time went by.
For example, we didn\'t expect that we would use a mobile phone and smart phone.
>> CORRECT
However, engineer and inventor finally showed the new technology for customers.
>> However, engineers and inventors finally showed the new technology for customers.
As I know, many doctors and scientists have studied about a artificial heart and have published their research results.
We can easily meet the patient who has a cardiac pacemaker.
I think that It\'s a kind of mechanical heart.
If it will happen, a lot of patients can be treated.
>> CORRECT
However, researchers must have a lot of trials to animals before they implement a mechanical heart to the public.
>> However, researchers must have a lot of experiments using animals before they exhibit the mechanical heart.
I hope that nobody have a serious disease and can be treated by new treatment.
>> I hope that nobody has a serious disease to be treated by this new treatment.

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