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I think personal mindset is the most important thing for coping with stress. If we don\'t have healthy mindset, we can\'t notice we\'re overwhelmed by stress. And this situation makes us exhausted. Even if we know that we got a stress, it is difficult to handle with unhealthy mindset. It is easy to just avoid problems, cope the stress with negative way such as smoking and drinking even going depress. Also, at that situcation, social support from friends and family has a limitation for resolve the problems. Therefore, it is important to stay mentally health and take care ourselves in daily life.
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Hello, Mary! You shared a thoughtful and mature opinion, and your main idea is very clear: personal mindset plays a key role in coping with stress. I like how you explained that without a healthy mindset, people may not even realize they are overwhelmed and may choose unhealthy coping methods. Your example about negative behaviors helped support your point well. To improve, try to focus on clearer sentence structure and correct word forms (for example, “mentally healthy,” “handle stress,” and “coping in negative ways”). Overall, this is a strong response with good reasoning, keep working on accuracy while maintaining this depth of thinking.
-Teacher Wela
I think personal mindset is the most important thing for coping with stress.
>> I think a personal mindset is the most important thing in coping with stress.
>> I think a personal mindset is the most important thing in coping with stress.
If we don\'t have healthy mindset, we can\'t notice we\'re overwhelmed by stress.
>> If we don\'t have a healthy mindset, we can\'t notice that we\'re overwhelmed by stress.
>> If we don\'t have a healthy mindset, we can\'t notice that we\'re overwhelmed by stress.
Even if we know that we got a stress, it is difficult to handle with unhealthy mindset.
>> Even if we know that we are stressed, it is difficult to handle it with an unhealthy mindset.
>> Even if we know that we are stressed, it is difficult to handle it with an unhealthy mindset.
It is easy to just avoid problems, cope the stress with negative way such as smoking and drinking even going depress.
>> It is easy to avoid problems or cope with stress in negative ways, such as smoking, drinking, or even becoming depressed.
>> It is easy to avoid problems or cope with stress in negative ways, such as smoking, drinking, or even becoming depressed.
Also, at that situcation, social support from friends and family has a limitation for resolve the problems.
>> Also, in that situation, social support from friends and family has limitations in resolving the problem.
>> Also, in that situation, social support from friends and family has limitations in resolving the problem.
Therefore, it is important to stay mentally health and take care ourselves in daily life.
>> Therefore, it is important to stay mentally healthy and take care of ourselves in daily life.
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