Do you think special occasions and festivals are important in your country?

2017-05-15 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

I think these things are important in my country. There are two reasons to support my opinion. The first reason is that we can interact with other poeple at that day. So, we can share different opinions and perspectives with others. The second reason is that it helps us get rid of stress. we can enjoy dance and delicious food, so we can relieve stress. In conclusion, I believe that these days are important for these reasons.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon [이름]!

Thank you for sharing your opinion about occasions and festivals in your country. Celebration is another thing that everyone should take time for. It adds an excitement and a lot of fun to life. Anyway, have a great lunch!

~Kelly^^

I think these things are important in my country.

>> Correct.

There are two reasons to support my opinion.

>> Correct.
The first reason is that we can interact with other poeple at that day.

>> The first reason is that we can interact with other people on those occasions.

So, we can share different opinions and perspectives with others.

>> Correct.
The second reason is that it helps us get rid of stress.

>> The second reason is that those occasions help us get rid of stress.

we can enjoy dance and delicious food, so we can relieve stress.

>> We can enjoy dancing and eating delicious food, so we can relieve our stress.
In conclusion, I believe that these days are important for these reasons.

>> In conclusion, I believe that these occasions are important for these reasons.

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