Do you think sports stars have the best life?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, at laest in Korea many sports stars have the best life.
Once, they have acheve thier sport event at the top on the world. They might feel ecstatic when they winned.
When they get a gold medal they can have opportunity to get house in the first order. It is a national blessing.
And Korean have big proud for them.
Every people like them and they will receive with hospitality.
Nowadays a lot of althletes who are retired appeared on TV especially entertainment programs.
They share their real life without sports. That\'s interesting.
Even they are retired, people loves them. That is the perfect and best life.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] [이름]!
Being an athlete is a good job. Athletes don\'t only enjoy their jobs but also have fun exercising, traveling, and earning. Check the correct spelling of words you have used as well as patterns. ^^
Being an athlete is a good job. Athletes don\'t only enjoy their jobs but also have fun exercising, traveling, and earning. Check the correct spelling of words you have used as well as patterns. ^^
~T. Maine
>> Yes, at least in Korea, many athletes have the best lives.
Once, they have acheve thier sport event at the top on the world.
Once, they have acheve thier sport event at the top on the world.
>>Once they have achieved their sports event, they are at the top of the world.
They might feel ecstatic when they winned.
>> They might feel ecstatic when they win.
When they get a gold medal they can have opportunity to get house in the first order.
When they get a gold medal they can have opportunity to get house in the first order.
>> When they get a gold medal, they can have the opportunity to get a house in the first order.
It is a national blessing.
>> Correct.
And Korean have big proud for them.
And Korean have big proud for them.
>>And Koreans are proud of them.
Every people like them and they will receive with hospitality.
Every people like them and they will receive with hospitality.
>> Correct.
Nowadays a lot of althletes who are retired appeared on TV especially entertainment programs.
Nowadays a lot of althletes who are retired appeared on TV especially entertainment programs.
>>Nowadays, a lot of athletes who retired appear on TV, especially on entertainment programs.
They share their real life without sports.
They share their real life without sports.
>> They share their real-life stories without sports.
That\'s interesting.
>> Correct.
Even they are retired, people loves them.
Even they are retired, people loves them.
>> Even if they are retired, people still love them.
That is the perfect and best life.
>> Correct.
>>OR: That is a better kind of life.
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