Do you think stress is ever good, useful, or necessary? Why or why not?.

2020-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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I don\'t think stress is ever good because I have seen a lot of articles about stress. Many experts. say that stress is one of the main cause of various disease. I fully agree with experts because I have been sick due to severe stress. However, many professionals issued their study that some amount of stress are good to push just to level of optimal alertness, behavioral and cognitive performance. Stress can strengthen the immune system and protect against some disease. I have read the article about this issue, and then was surprised because moderate levels of stress before surgery help preventing breast cancer because it suppress the production of estrogen. I thought stress is just thing we need to get rid of but I learnt that moderate stress can help keep people\'s health.

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I don\'t think stress is ever good because I have seen a lot of articles about stress.

>> CORRECT

Many experts. say that stress is one of the main cause of various disease.

>> Many experts say that stress is one of the main causes of various diseases.

I fully agree with experts because I have been sick due to severe stress.

>> CORRECT

However, many professionals issued their study that some amount of stress are good to push just to level of optimal alertness, behavioral and cognitive performance.

>> However, many professionals issued their study that some amount of stress are good just to push a person to a certain level of optimal alertness, behavioral and cognitive performance.

Stress can strengthen the immune system and protect against some disease.

>> Stress can strengthen the immune system and protect the body against some diseases.

I have read the article about this issue, and then was surprised because moderate levels of stress before surgery help preventing breast cancer because it suppress the production of estrogen.

>> I have read the article about this issue, and then was surprised because moderate levels of stress before surgery can help prevent breast cancer because it suppresses the production of estrogen.

I thought stress is just thing we need to get rid of but I learnt that moderate stress can help keep people\'s health.

>> I thought stress is something we need to get rid of but I learnt that moderate stress can help keep people\'s health.

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