Do you think that art is important to society? Why?
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Yes, I think art is important to society. Because people are comforted by art. In other words, art influences people positively. For example, some people are cured by art, and then, they do their best on their own positions. As a result, society is activated. Like this, art is so important to society. So, I would like to tell artists \"Thanks to you, many people, including me are comforted. Thank you so much.\"
강사 첨삭
Good day, Kimberly!
As always, another great homework output from you ^^
Arts was one of my favorite subjects when I was a student. It was an outlet for me to express myself beacuse I was inspired by other artists also.
It is true that Arts gives life to our society and makes everything colorful.
This is a well-made homework. Good one!
~ Teacher Gela
Yes, I think art is important to society.
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Because people are comforted by art.
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OR >> Yes, I think art is important to society because people are comforted by art.
In other words, art influences people positively.
>> CORRECT
For example, some people are cured by art, and then, they do their best on their own positions.
>> CORRECT
OR >> For example, some people are cured by art which helps them do their best on their own positions.
As a result, society is activated.
>> CORRECT
Like this, art is so important to society.
>> Because of this, art is so important to society.
OR >> Because of this, art is essential to society.
So, I would like to tell artists \"Thanks to you, many people, including me are comforted. Thank you so much.\"
>> CORRECT
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