Do you think that children these days have a better or worse childhood than your generation?

2022-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think that these days children have a better childhood than my generation. It\'s because parents know that how important about spending time with their children. When I was a child. My parents were very busy. They had worked for 6 days, and they should do chores on Sunday, especially mother did it. I had no time to talk with my parents, and nobody said to me that why do I study hard. I am a father. I try to talk with my sun. I want to let he know, why person have to do study. I am sure that my children\'s childhoods better than my childhood.

강사 첨삭

Good evening [이름]ny! :)

Thank you for writing your honest answer about this essay question.
It is true that kids receive more attention from their parents these days.
Family time is very important and kids are guided better.
I hope you\'re having a great evening. ^^
See you again on our next class.
Have a great weekend.
~Teacher Charry

I think that these days children have a better childhood than my generation.

>> I think that these days children have a better childhood than in my generation.

It\'s because parents know that how important about spending time with their children.

>> It\'s because parents know how important it is to spend time with their children.

When I was a child. My parents were very busy.

>> When I was a child my parents were always very busy.

They had worked for 6 days, and they should do chores on Sunday, especially mother did it.

>> They worked for 6 days a week and did chores on Sundays especially my mother.

I had no time to talk with my parents, and nobody said to me that why do I study hard.

>> I had no time to talk with my parents and none of them told me that I have to study hard.

I am a father.

>> CORRECT!

I try to talk with my sun.

>> I try to talk with my son.

I want to let he know, why person have to do study.

>> I want to let him know why a person has to study hard.

I am sure that my children\'s childhoods better than my childhood.

>> I will make sure that my children\'s childhood would be better than my childhood.

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