Do you think that children these days have a better or worse childhood than your generation?

2022-05-10 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think there are better parts and worse parts. The parts that got better are education, technology and welfare for children. on the other hand, the worse part is that the kids don\'t seem to be sensitive, compared to our generation. When I played with my cou[이름], I asked him what do you want to be when you grow up?. And then he said when I grow up, I will be an Youtuber. I think their dreams are limited because They get to know these things easily.

강사 첨삭

Hi Elic! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I think there are better parts and worse parts. 
>> CORRECT

The parts that got better are education, technology and welfare for children. 
>> CORRECT

on the other hand, the worse part is that the kids don\'t seem to be sensitive, compared to our generation. 
>> On the other hand, the worse part is that the kids don\'t seem to be sensitive compared to our generation. 

When I played with my cou[이름], I asked him what do you want to be when you grow up?.
>> CORRECT

 And then he said when I grow up, I will be an Youtuber. 
>>  And then he said when I grow up, I will be a Youtuber. 

I think their dreams are limited because They get to know these things easily.
>> I think their dreams are limited because they get to know these things easily.

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