Do you think that goals are different for people of different ages?
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Wow! Thank you for doing your homework, Jason!
This is such an enlightening paragraph^^
Every person has indeed different priorities~
I hope you fulfill each of them^^
A man when he was young, he had wanted to travel more than 10 countries since he liked to meet foreigner.
>>A man, when he was young, had wanted to travel in more than 10 countries since he liked to meet foreigners.
And when he graduated from university, he wanted to be an electrical engineer because he needed to earn money for his travelling plan.
>>And when he graduated from university, he wanted to be an electrical engineer because he needed to earn money for his traveling plan.
After that, his dream was delayed since he spent a lot of money for dating and giving her gifts because his goal also changed to get married her more than his first dream.
>>After that, his dream was delayed since he spent a lot of money on dating and giving a woman gifts because his goal also changed to get married to her more than his first dream.
After he bore his child, the first his goal was delayed again since he needed to take care of his families.
>>After having his first child, his first goal was delayed again since he needed to take care of his families.
Finally, when he reached almost 60 years old, the first goal was finished since he really was eager to go travel.
>>Finally, when he reached 60 years old, the first goal was finished since he really was eager to go traveling.
Hence, in my opinion, most of the people change their achievements to adjust with their circumstances.
>>Hence, in my opinion, most of the people change their achievements to adjust to their circumstances.
So they have different goals with based on their ages.
>>So they have different goals based on their ages.
But, nevertheless, if they really eager to accomplish something, they might be able to do everything as I wrote before.
>>Nevertheless, if they are really eager to accomplish something, they might be able to do everything as I wrote before.
Regarding the story to reach the goal, age is not important if they will not give up it.
>>CORRECT!
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