Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
No, I don\'t. Because I think having a lot of great people is more important than having a lot of money. Through money, I can do many things, but it can\'t make me happy. I think feelings are valuable. I can\'t buy it with a lot of money. Money can\'t make me happy but it can be a way which I can feel happy. For example, having a lot of money can\'t make me happy but spending a lot of money for the people around me can make me happy. So, I hope that I will not do bad things to have a lot of money in the future.
강사 첨삭
Hi Kimberly!
Yes, that is true. Money cannot but memories and our happiness but it can be a way for us to be. So at some point, it is still important.
No, I don\'t.
>> No, I don\'t because I think having a lot of great people is more important than having a lot of money.
Because I think having a lot of great people is more important than having a lot of money.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.
Through money, I can do many things, but it can\'t make me happy.
>> CORRECT
I think feelings are valuable.
>> I think feelings are more valuable.
I can\'t buy it with a lot of money.
>> CORRECT
Money can\'t make me happy but it can be a way which I can feel happy.
>> Money can\'t make me happy but it can be a way for me to be happy.
For example, having a lot of money can\'t make me happy but spending a lot of money for the people around me can make me happy.
>> CORRECT
So, I hope that I will not do bad things to have a lot of money in the future.
>> So, I hope that I will not do bad things when I have a lot of money in the future.
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