Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not?
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In my opinion, money is just a tool that can make us happy a little.
We can do many things with money such as buying some stuff, and staying in a cozy house.
We can feel happiness because we are in a comfortable situation when we have a lot of money.
But, exactly, money doesn\'t make us happy.
We just feel happiness when we are enjoying something that make us comfortable.
Money doesn\'t make us comfortable, instead, we can feel comfortable by money.
So I think money is just a key that we can be happy and comfortable.
But there are many exceptions so we shouldn\'t be crazy to money.
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Hi [이름] :)
That\'s true. Money is a big aspect in our lives but it is not the only thing that keeps us alive.
In my opinion, money is just a tool that can make us happy a little.
>> In my opinion, money is just a tool that can make us happy for a little bit.
We can do many things with money such as buying some stuff, and staying in a cozy house.
>> We can do many things with money such as buying some stuff, and affording to stay at a cozy house.
We can feel happiness because we are in a comfortable situation when we have a lot of money.
>> CORRECT
But, exactly, money doesn\'t make us happy.
>> But money alone can\'t make us happy.
We just feel happiness when we are enjoying something that make us comfortable.
>> CORRECT
Money doesn\'t make us comfortable, instead, we can feel comfortable by money.
>> Money doesn\'t make us comfortable, instead, we can feel comfortable because of money.
So I think money is just a key that we can be happy and comfortable.
>> So I think money is just a key so that we can be happy and comfortable.
But there are many exceptions so we shouldn\'t be crazy to money.
>> Still, there are many exceptions so we should be too crazy about money.
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