Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not?

2022-01-22 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Do you think that having a lot of money can make you happy? Why or why not? I think that I\'m happier than having no money. But Happiness doesn\'t come from money. For making a lot of money, people give up their happiness. It would depend on what I want to choose.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]:)

That\'s true. Money is a big aspect in our lives but it is not the only thing that keeps us alive.

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I think that I\'m happier than having no money.

>> I think I\'m happier with having money but happiness doesn\'t come from money.

But Happiness doesn\'t come from money.

>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.

For making a lot of money, people give up their happiness.

>> People sometimes give up their happiness just to earn money.

It would depend on what I want to choose.

>> It will depend on what I want to choose.

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