Do you think that having money and fame means that you are a successful person?
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Hello, Mr. [이름]! Thanks for this. I agree that our views on success depend on the culture we\'ve grown into. For additional ideas, you may share it in class. ^^
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The definition of success varies from person to person and from where they are living.
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It is strongly related with a culture. However, money can be the first value for people to evaluate their life.
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This is the negative sides of the capitalism because many people think that they are not happy, if they don\'t have money.
>> This is one of the negative sides of capitalism because many people think that they are not happy, if they don\'t have money.
Actually, a lot of people believe that they can do anything, if they have a lot of money.
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Rich people believe that there is nothing they can\'t do.
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Young people in our country already give up to be a helpful guys because of economic polarization.
>> Young people in our country already gave up being helpful because of economic polarization.
Many people realize that they can\'t make minimum money for their live because only money can make money.
>> Many people realized that they can\'t make the minimum amount of money needed to support their lifestyle, because only money can make money.
People are born in the wealthy family can be successful the other people can\'t.
>> People born in a wealthy family can be successful while other people can\'t.
Our government has tried to reduce the gap between rich and poor people by various laws.
>> Our government has tried to reduce the gap between the rich and poor by implementing various laws.
However, I am not sure if it will work.
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I feel really envy to some countries whose people feel happy without living enough money.
>> I feel really envious towards some countries whose people feel happy even without living with enough money.
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